Some Governments say how many children a family can have in their country should be strictly controlled. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. Is it sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way? Do you agree or disagree with this policy?

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Family is the most important thing that ever

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, family means love, caring and comfort, in some religions like Islam parents can`t make a specific number of

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like China controls the number of birth for each family within two kids, in my

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is not the right way because a lot of women may get pregnant and not register the child only because she can`t afford to pay taxes for them, or she

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and the culture of it. from my point of view controlling population should be more organized for

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Topic Vocabulary:

Population control
Reproductive rights
Family planning
One-child policy
Demographic issues
Sustainability
Coercive measures
Birth rate
Fertility rate
Economic burden
Social engineering
Carrying capacity
Eugenics
Voluntary compliance
Contraception availability
Tax incentives
Gender disparity
Population pyramid
Pro-natalist policies
Aging society
Socioeconomic factors

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