You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

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Dear Aunt May, I am writing to let you know that I will be travelling to Mangalore on June 12th. I will be in town for a week,
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, until June 19th. I will be attending two conferences during my time in Mangalore. The first one is in Attavar, and the other is at Surathkal. Since you live in the middle of these locations, I was wondering if it would be possible for me to stay at your home during my visit. My mother mentioned that your tenant recently vacated the bedroom on the second floor of your house. If you give me permission, I would be able to spend some quality time with you, cousin Andy and her little one.
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, I wanted to mention to you that I would be more than happy to pay rent for the room during my stay, as I do not want to burden you and your family. Please let me know your thoughts on
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Lots of love, Krithi

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For task response: Add one more small line about why you come to this city. This can make the purpose even more clear.
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For task response: The line about paying is good, but you can make it more direct and short.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter is easy to follow, but one or two link words can be used in a more smooth way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: There is a small comma space error in 'that is , until'. Check small form points like this.
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For task response: You answer all three parts of the task clearly.
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For task response: The tone is warm, polite, and right for a letter to family.
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For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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For coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
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