some people think money is the best gift to youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Now a days
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Many of us believing that
Money
was the best precious gift to the youngsters,
However
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Few of them was disagree of that belief. Without
Money
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we cannot buy anything and do
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whatever
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what ever
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you want.
Recieving
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Receiving
a
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money
as a gift while on
child
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the child
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stage was
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graceful
grateful
gracefully
gracefull
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experience, they can buy
a toys
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toys
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,nice dress or lots of candies and chocolates.
However
,On the other side
money
cannot built
a
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wonderful memories and
experience
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experiences
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.As a child
stage
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more of them was attracting
the
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apply
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love and spending
a
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time together. As we all know
money
can give us happiness
however
memories to the
love
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one was more precious while we are on
a
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apply
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youngsters.Spending and make
a good memories
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good memories
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was the best
feel
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feeling
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ever.
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