Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from Prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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Some recent facts have shown that those
people
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who had just finished their sentence in
prison
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are more likely to conduct other crimes right after they return to
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.
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result is contributed by some reasons which will be elaborated below.
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off, as we might have known that those who just entered the
prison
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will be put with other
criminals
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. As most of their time in
prison
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will be spent with other
criminals
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,
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such
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a negative environment may nurture their criminal minds and behaviour.
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, a new
person
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who enters the
prison
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because of hate speech
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social media is put with killers in the cell. As the consequence, that new
person
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may learn the technique of how to kill
people
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. When
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a
person
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returns to
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, he or she may kill those who mock him or her on social media.
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,
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puts
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on those who have finished their punishment in
prison
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. Those
criminals
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tend to have limited access and opportunity to live well and positively in
society
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.
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, most of the recruitment requirement standard of the company requires the applicant to have never conducted any kind of crimes. These restrictions limit their opportunity to have a decent job. As the result, they have no option other than
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thieves, so they can feed themselves.
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, most of those ex-
criminals
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are mostly lack sufficient hard
skills
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and soft
skills
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. Without any decent
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they will not be accepted in most of the companies. Without a job they have no money to survive,
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, they have to do crimes,
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as steal or rob from
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or banks in order to stay alive from day
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. Based on the factors aforementioned and considering
prison
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has the responsibility to re-create a new
person
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before return to
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,
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my suggestion is the
prison
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has to review, evaluate and revise their system. They have to change their concept from punishing
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to educate
people
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. So, those
criminals
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can learn soft
skills
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and hard
skills
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in
prison
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. After they return to
society
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, the ex-
criminals
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can use their
skills
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to become entrepreneurs or to support private companies. Regardless, the government is
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responsible to create a policy to force the companies to accept those ex-
criminals
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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