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In future more people will choose to go to holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holidays. Do you agree or disagree?

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A recent study shows 75% of people like to travel around their own
country
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.Commonly, people admire visiting
places
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 in their own
country
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instead
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 of visiting parts of the world. I do not agree because the majority of people wish to see other regions of the
country
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 essay.
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, the public love to enjoy their vacation by travelling to many new
places
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 in the
country
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. Generally, most of us aspire to see new neighbourhoods
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 of the same old
places
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 we have already seen.
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, exploring new areas and acquiring new skills is much better than hanging around in the same place. Other than that, we could gain better knowledge about the world if we travel to many communities.
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, my favourite drink is Italian coffee but I never got a chance to taste the real flavour of it since I did not get an opportunity to visit Italy.In comparison, the money required to be invested in order to visit
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 outside the home is
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 more but the adventure gained is worth all the money we spent on it. To summarize, the satisfaction of a person's mind is all that matters. When we travel to different
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 numerous knowledge can be accumulated than visiting
places
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 inside a small area.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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