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Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over the natural character of males and females. While some people claim that
men
 are more aggressive than
women
 to some extent, I personally consider myself an opponent to
this
 notion.
This
 essay is devoted to analyzing the underlying roots of
this
 perception, followed by some reasonable ideas. It is understandable to note that males are likely more competitive than
women
. Obviously, they were born with muscle, and their physical, as well as their mental health, is always strong.
That is
 the reason why an overwhelming majority of
men
 are constituted for jobs that require intensive strength
such
 as leadership. Throughout world history, it is irrefutable that most rulers and top management positions bias
men
. Donald Trump, who was a former prime minister in the US, has successfully defeated his rival, Hilary Clinton in the conquest of the US president’s seat since the dwellers believed that only male rulers can control a whole system of one nation. For those reasons, it is comprehensible if
men
 are more preferred in many fields than females. While the redeeming features of
men
 are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if those of
women
 are being overlooked. Despite the fact that
women
 are considered to be naturally soft in every aspect, that thinking is now obsolete in modern society. Since we are living in a gender equality civilization, many
women
 have participated themself in competitions that involve the power of mentality and physicality, and successfully prove that
women
 are not less competitive than their counterparts. Angela Merkel can be cited as a viable instance since she has ruled Germany for many years as a president, based on her straightforward personality and her professionalism. In conclusion, I am well convinced that though males are physically fit rather than
women
, it is essential to eliminate gender-based discrimination since both of them deserve recognition.
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