Some people think that the best way to stay fit is joining gym while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People
have different views about training in the gym as opposed to doing basic daily exercise on their own. While some easy movements do help to
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keet
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fit, I believe fitness centres can be more helpful.
People
who prefer everyday physical exercise may think it
more
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accessible and affordable.
However
, activities like walking or climbing can be easily influenced by weather
condition
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.
People
could hardly do them in bad weather. What's more,
although
it's simple to do those daily
trainings
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, only parts of the body can be improved once.
For example
, by walking a long round or climbing stairs,
people
could only practise for stronger legs or feet.
Finally
, parks, mountains may be free to
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people
, they are not ideal places for training as you may
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by stones, plastic bottles on the ground.
Conversely
, doing
sports
in professional
sports
centres has more benefits.
Firstly
, guided by a well-trained coach, you may get a tailored plan, which is more suitable and accurate.
Secondly
, by doing enough warming-up and post-relaxing activities under instructions, you could hardly get
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or be hurt
accidently
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.
Finally
, a variety range of
sports
equipment is here in the stadium, by which you can fully practise almost every part of your body. All the
physcial
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physical
measurements are often contained and upgraded to make sure wonderful training experiences for their
memebers
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members
. In conclusion,
although
some routine methods seem good to health, it
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has some drawbacks. Getting specific help and careful protection in the gym can make health-keeping better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Structured workouts
  • Professional guidance
  • Variety of equipment
  • Tailored fitness programs
  • Motivation
  • Convenient
  • Cost-effective
  • Natural integration
  • Comprehensive workout
  • Measure progress
  • Self-motivation
  • Sustainable
  • Fitness habits
  • General well-being
  • Psychological benefits
  • Intimidation
  • Time commitment
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