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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people’s health and capacity for work?

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Neurobiologists and psychologists have demonstrated a significant relationship between distinct
color
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 schemes and a person's mood.
Although
 the scientific bases for these phenomena are far from completely understood I believe it is paramount to dedicate decorations of
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work places
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 according to current scientific evidence. Some people claim that interior design does not affect how we feel,
moreover
, any influence of
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 on a person's mood can be perceived as pseudo-science or esoteric. Recent scientific evidence,
however
, clearly states that distinct
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 schemes can drastically influence our well-being which in turn has consequences on our stress levels and productivity. A good example of the positive impact of
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 can be seen in children's hospitals. Here,
pediatricians
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 rarely wear white coats which make them look distant and inaccessible.
Moreover
, the positive impact on children's health of hospital clowns equipped with artful costumes and toys is evident.
Art
 therapy is another example of the stimulating effects of
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 on our well-being.
Although
 it was widely discarded several decades ago, it is firmly established in any larger hospital to date.
Additionally
, there is broad scientific consensus that complementary therapies
such
 as
art
 therapy
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 accelerate the healing process in a variety of oncological or psychiatric diseases and many more. In my
opinion
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 I find it evident that a majority of people appreciate
colorful
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 drawings in their offices rather than being exposed to monotonic grey walls. Museums and
art
 galleries are designated public spaces that attract many people
enjoying
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 the view of paintings. The positive effect of
colors
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 on our psyche is substantiated by scientific evidence which shows that our brains tend to be more active when exposed to
art
. Overall, I believe that our current understanding of the brain speaks in
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 of being more attentive to
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 schemes when it comes to decorating offices and hospitals.
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