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What are the benefits of extracurricular for high school students?

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Extracurricular
activities
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 play a crucial role in
children
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' development. Especially for secondary school students.
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 essay will analyze the positive effects of
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.
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 and foremost, participating in
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 can be a helpful way of reducing stress and increasing mental well-being.
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 is important to keep the body in good health in order to be able to keep our mind strong and clear after spending all day sitting at a desk.
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 lead to
children
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's academic improvement
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, extracurricular
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 bring pupils together. Thereby, they strengthen solidarity and friendship among
children
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. Teamwork and social interaction will be increased. If
children
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 always play on a team,
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however
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 they don't have a chance to do things alone, they don't learn how to play with just one.
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, these
activities
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also
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 help develop lots of skills. In a nutshell, removing
children
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 stress, and bringing them together are the benefits that extracurricular
activities
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 bring about. I am strong of the opinion that secondary school students take part in some kind of
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 and balance those and study to become successful citizens in the future.

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