You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter in response to an advertisement, published
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week in one of the leading Australian Magazine, where you asked for a short term lived caregiver for your six –year old child. Mentioned that, I am very keen on taking the job as I feel I have the proper expertise to do the job. I am confident that I can look after
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your child perfectly because I have vast experience
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babysitting
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long
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. To be more precise, I have worked in several
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daycare
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day care
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centre
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for five years in my hometown.
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, your house is located within 10 minutes of walking distance from the
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of Melbourn where I intended to start my master’s degree from
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January.
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, I would be suitable for
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job because I worked in the elementary school for some time
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, I like to spend time with children as well as they
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tend to like me in a short span of time.
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, my academic results are quite good and my English communication skills are
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.
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, I consider
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a deserving candidate for your child. During my days off, I will be learning about new courses relating to my study as well as visiting new tourist attractions. I am looking forward to waiting for your prompt reply. Sincerely Yours, Evan Alam
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