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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Some people opine that all universities should enrol the same number of male and female
students
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 in each course.I totally disagree with
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 notion as I believe that both genders have
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equal rights to get admitted
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 a university according to their talents;while,
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 policy violates the concept of equal rights.
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 details will be discussed in
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 with,education at the tertiary level is very important in sustaining and developing
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society.The important qualifications are
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academic performance and merit.Here gender issues should not be considered.The equal figure of male and female
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 in every
subject
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 is a whimsical idea that would deprive many talented
students
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.
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,all males and females are not equally interested in studying in every
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,they have their own choices.Implementing the equal sum of male and female
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 in each
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 would take away the freedom from
students
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 to study in their favourite
subject
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.
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,in
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 contemporary modern
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 where freedom and meritocracy are the new facts,
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 policies will be detrimental to the democracy of the
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.A student should be selected for a course according to his or her previous academic record and devotion to that particular
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 rather than taking into consideration his or her gender.
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,statistics have shown that
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 in some places of the
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 consists of more women than men.So,if we go according to the concept of the equal number of boys and girls,unfortunately,we will never be able to keep the balance levelled.Definitely,it is a flawed policy. To conclude,according to my opinion,quality is always better than quantity.
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,universities should accept
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 according to their qualities and willingness to work hard in their selective subjects because only qualitative initiatives can keep the
world
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 modernised and developed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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