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in many places new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not building new homes there . what is your opinion give reasons and examples

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
There is a steady increase in the population of people all over the world,and these people have to be catered for
hence
,an increase in the need to build more houses. Ordinarily speaking,new homes should be built elsewhere asides
the
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countryside
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country
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side
 because it is not yet developed.Most of them are even close to the
sea
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side
 and which could endanger the lives of people when they start dwelling there.
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, there was a
country
which
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 was said that a very rich man built a mansion on the edge of the land.On a very sad day,a large wild animal came from
no where
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 to devour his only child while he was away. The
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country
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side
 is
such
 a serene environment,houses are made to be built in places where
there
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their
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 land
texture
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 are so fit enough to carry buildings. Going
further
,
this
 type of place in question is made to be used as farming
lands
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.Building more dwelling
place
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 in an area meant for farming only means that we would have
fewer
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 agricultural
produce
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 available to us.How would people cope when more foods cannot be produced and harvested?
Furthermore
,the building more houses in
country
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countryside
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side
 area would sure cause
an
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 high increase in global warming effect which is what we detest.It means there would be
high
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 level of deforestation. In conclusion,the rural area should be left in peace and not be disturbed,other places other than the
country
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countryside
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side
 should be looked
in to
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 for building.
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