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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The use of
technology
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 is becoming increasingly popular in the world. There is a debate between
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, some of them believe that
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advantages
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of
technology
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arehelping
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are helping
men
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 to be more social. I completely disagree with
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 statement. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss why I think
technology
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 leads people to be less social.
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 with,
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 has a lot of benefits, but
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 of the most side effects is leading
men
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 to be less social. machinery
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 as iPod, iPhone and laptops decrease the
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 interaction between
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the crowd
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, so
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 of gathering and talking, they will use different applications to chat or send a message.
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the nation
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nation
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 used to meet at clubs watching the match together and having dinner, but ,
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instead
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 they stare at the phones for hours.
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, online applications, In the past public used to negotiate,
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,in Saudi Arabia
men
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 used to wake up on Friday went to Green House market, so the customers and sellers negotiate about the products.
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, after the spread of
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, society using the internet to buy, and don't care like before. To summarise, machinery is
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 of the most useful inventions, while
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 of its negative effects is
men
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 are not very sociable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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