Some people say that it is individual responsibility to protect the environment while others say it is the government's primary role. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that
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the
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it
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depends on each person responsibility, while some think it depends on the
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. I agree with the latter view. On the one hand, some
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believe that it is
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responsibility to protect the
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because those
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believe that even the
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force
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to take care
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environment
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, it is not going to work quite well if most
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not cooperated.
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, to solve the environmental problems they believe that
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need to create more awareness about
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environment
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the environment

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since young.
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, children need to be taught about how to categorize the rubbish before
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it
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trash can, some children may need to be aware
where
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of where

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they can throw the rubbish
to
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, obviously not
on
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the middle of the street.
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, some
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may say that we,
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people
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, have to use
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electrical energy as low as possible, as to create electricity, it produced air pollution.
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, some
people
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consider that it is the
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's primary responsibility to protect
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nature and I agree. One of the
reason
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is
because
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, in many countries, including Thailand, there are
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campaigns that encourage
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to be more aware of environmental issues,
however
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, the results of those
compaigns
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are not desirable. In my opinion, it is almost impossible to hope that everyone going to be more aware if there are no rules for them to follow, and
that is
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where the
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plays a vital role. The
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needs to enforce the law more strictly,
for example
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, if we found somebody threw the rubbish on the street we can tell the police and that person will have to pay
the
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certain amount of money, and
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who tell the police may get some parts of that money as well. I believe that if the laws are better enforced, it will reflect
to
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to be better at taking care
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environment
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. In conclusion, despite
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having different views, I believe that the
govermant
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is the key to solve
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environment
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problems because they can enforce the law more strictly rather than just begging
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to be more aware
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environment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Individual responsibility
  • Community involvement
  • Personal accountability
  • Governmental intervention
  • Environmental protection
  • Recycling
  • Public transport
  • Conserving resources
  • Spreading awareness
  • CO2 emissions restrictions
  • Waste management protocols
  • Renewable energy
  • Enact and enforce regulations
  • Incentivize individual action
  • Frameworks
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