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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? How can its popularity be increased?

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It is obvious that cycling is more eco-friendly than other forms of private transport. There are some reasons for
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 trend and some effective measures can be taken to overcome the [reluctance] of the public to use bikes and to make the bicycle a more popular means of transport There are several reasons why cycling as an activity is not more popular.
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, cycling demands a reasonable level of physical fitness to cope with a journey of any length, going up hills and perhaps confrontingbiting winds and rain.
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, many people are put off cycling by the danger of using busy roads.
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 many children used to cycle to school, the roads were much less hazardous than fifty years ago, and today cyclists have to confront heavy traffic.
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, journeys by bike generally take longer than travelling by car, which is a major factor in the busy and stressful lives which most people seem to lead nowadays. With a little public and private initiative, the popularity of cycling could easily be increased. Anyone can build up their fitness, beginning with using a bike for short journeys to school, to work or to the shops. Campaigns in the media, in schools and
workplaces
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 could promote the health benefits of cycling, and offices and factories should provide changing facilities and hot showers for employees arriving cold or wet by bike. Authorities must discourage motorists from using their cars by introducing congestion charges, as in London, reducing traffic on the roads and encouraging more people to use bikes. If more city cycle lanes are
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 constructed, these will keep cyclists safe and speed up journey times. In conclusion, with planning and
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 it should be possible to increase the popularity of cycling, especially for all those short trips to work or school.
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