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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

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Vehicles
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 that are running on city roads, that uses petrol and diesel as
fuel
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, should not be allowed and prohibited for its
use
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, and
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 most efficient and environmentally-friendly electric
cars
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 are used. I total agree that those
vehicles
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 that run on conventional
fuel
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, should be expired from their
use
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 and modern
vehicles
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 that work on Electric batteries can be
instead
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 used. In the forthcoming, paragraphs I will explain in detail why
transport
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vehicles
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 that
use
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 traditional fuels should be forbidden. The majority of
Transport
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vehicles
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 engines like
cars
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, buses and trucks are designed and manufactured to Utilize primary sources of conventional fuels like Gasoline LPG, Petrol and Diesel but in recent years
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 trend is transferring to electric
cars
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. Road
Transport
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 automobile which runs on conventional
fuel
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 emits harmful toxic gases which are polluting our environment and destroying the earth’s natural habitat.
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, many living animal species from insects to birds and other animals are severely affected and are dying, by these harmful gases and are
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 verge of extinction. According to the research conducted by a New York metropolitan board on pollution control, it was found that if the current emission of
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vehicles
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 is not regulated, it will result in the extinction of many living animal species and eventually our future generations may not be aware of them.
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, switching conventional
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transport
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vehicles
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 to more efficient and environmentally friendly electric
transport
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vehicles
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 will assist in regulating air pollution.
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, Electric
Cars
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 which works on very efficient Electric Batteries will have a huge benefit to the customers, because it reduces the conventional
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 cost of petrol, diesel and gasoline with charging batteries, which is only 30% to traditional
fuel
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.
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, it was found that recent past, many leading car manufacturers like Tesla, Toyota and Hyundai had increased production capacities of electric
cars
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 owing to the huge demand for them. But the General public is still anticipating the improvement of technology of these electric
cars
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, which will eventually lead to lower the prices of it favouring a major section of our community eventually who can purchase these electric
cars
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.
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, our Government policies awareness campaigns to encourage individuals, as well as providing incentives to electric car manufacturers
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 proved to be successful in bridging the gap, of converting conventional
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vehicles
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 to electric
vehicles
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.
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, I conclude that recent advancement in electric car technology has led to
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 in demand for it and
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cars
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 which
use
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 traditional
fuel
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 are depleting day by day from our city roads.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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