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In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Teaching children that working hard is a must and to achieve their goals is not an uncommon habit in most societies.
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 discuss the value of hard work on the way to
success
 as an advantage, and
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 outline the possibility of
failure
 and disappointment despite the whole effort. One of the main advantages of encouraging youngsters to achieve their goals via doing their best is the factualness of
this
 advice. Indeed, people doing their best have a much higher chance of
success
 than those just waiting for good results to occur
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.
On the other hand
, improving our background by studying hard brings us some benefits
such
 as
self- discipline
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, self-confidence and wisdom, which might indirectly bring us
success
 in the future.
For instance
, being a medical doctor was my dream job during
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 high school years and I studied for a year in order to be accepted for medical school.
Finally
, I was accepted to one of the best medical schools in my country. The major disadvantage associated with giving advice of trying their best will bring them
success
 in anything is the possibility of
failure
. Since that world is not a machinery system programmed on mathematical algorithms, ending up with
failure
 in spite of our efforts at some point
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 our life is inevitable.
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 case of making the children believe too strictly that they can achieve any goal by trying their best might lead to disappointment at those
failure
 moments.
For example
, depression and anxiety are more commonly seen in pupils who are taught to be always successful when they are hardworking. In conclusion, the idea of making an effort is a requirement for
success
 has some benefits on youngsters’ personal development and
success
, whilst constructing a strict belief on
this
 idea might result in some negative consequences, which might be regarded as a great disadvantage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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