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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#protection #responsibility #politicians #individuals
Now a days
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 environmental issues are the one of
main
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the main
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problem
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problems
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 facing by
whole
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 world.I believe that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of human
being
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beings
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.There is no separation in gender, political,nation wise .
May be
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 people think
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only
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an only
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 responsible person is
politicians
 . In my point of
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view
wiew
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 all human
being
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beings
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have
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 equal rights to care
the
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 environment Most of the communities think that
politicians
 have
vital
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a vital
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role
 in environmental protection .But all
individual
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individuals
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having
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 the
responsibility
 to take care
.
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of.
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Each human can start their environmental services from their own home . Proper waste disposal management should practice from
there
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their
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 region .All human
being
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beings
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 have a vital
role
 in their own area.So environmental protection must be a respyfor each individual   
However
,
politicians
 have a vital
role
 in the process.
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An individual
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Individual
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 have limitations for their
role
 more support should be done by
government
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the government
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. For the government
support
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politicians
 can help the community . They can arrange programs classes development programs
to
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the
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society.
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example
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politicians
 can arrange financial help through government offices to the affected region To conclude each individual have vital
responsibility
 for the protection of
environment
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the environment
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.From each people can give
there
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their
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 own effort to the community.so both political and individual programs help to manage the community to take
responsibility
of
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 environmental issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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