As well as making money, the business should also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Myriads of social researchers consider that social activities have many merits rather than demerits to
companies
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and the business area should make money and social responsibilities as well. I am inclined to believe that if business
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interact with society and follow social plans it will be helpful to both sides.
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, many international business
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have social responsibilities due to
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superb opportunity to improve their reputation on the market.
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Also
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the government has released statements about supporting
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who will follow social plans and provide
them
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many benefits since 2015. Nowadays directors around the country have hired 250 special consultants
about
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apply
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working with social areas and knowing the lasting trends. As practice shows, the population will trust more to open
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who
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that
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always show reports, posts
in
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social media.
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, regarding the government's
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many
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allocate
budget
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to social areas
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as sport and media.
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: Beeline company runs a charity marathon in
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city annually, KazTransOil company makes many reports about pollution reduction by improving their equipment and invites many volunteers to show the result of the work. I am convinced
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open way will help many of them and improve their condition on the market In a nutshell, according to many social reports and
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this
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way allows them to be clone-knit with the population and having some social responsibilities have many pros rather than cons. Hiring special consultants have influenced
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and
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many
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to improve their results on the international market.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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