As well as making money, the business should also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?
Myriads of social researchers consider that social activities have many merits rather than demerits to
companies
and the business area should make money and social responsibilities as well. I am inclined to believe that if business companies
interact with society and follow social plans it will be helpful to both sides.
Firstly
, many international business companies
have social responsibilities due to this
superb opportunity to improve their reputation on the market. Also
the government has released statements about supporting Add a comma
,Also
companies
who will follow social plans and provide them
many benefits since 2015. Nowadays directors around the country have hired 250 special consultants Change the pronoun
their
about
working with social areas and knowing the lasting trends. As practice shows, the population will trust more to open Change preposition
apply
companies
who
always show reports, posts Correct pronoun usage
that
in
social media.
Change preposition
on
Secondly
, regarding the government's statements
many Add a comma
,statements
companies
allocate budget
to social areas Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
such
as sport and media. For example
: Beeline company runs a charity marathon in head
city annually, KazTransOil company makes many reports about pollution reduction by improving their equipment and invites many volunteers to show the result of the work. I am convinced Add an article
the head
this
open way will help many of them and improve their condition on the market
In a nutshell, according to many social reports and surveys
Add a comma
,surveys
this
way allows them to be clone-knit with the population and having some social responsibilities have many pros rather than cons. Hiring special consultants have influenced favorably
and Change the spelling
favourably
allow
many Change the verb form
allowed
companies
to improve their results on the international market.Submitted by PrimakovDen on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite