At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?
In the
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larger
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but
the disadvantage should not be overlooked.
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country
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people
. Mark Jukerburge in fact a young adult who is the founder of "Facebook", and he changes the meaning of communication. Therefore
, the growing people
have more impact for
the building of new civilization.
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development
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However
, experience is the best weapon to run a country
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who are responsible to govern the country
. As a result
, younger people
can work hard but older people
need to lead them in a better way.
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aged
people
to govern the nation, the younger are the only people
who can confirm the development and enrichment of a country
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
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