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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe that actions can be taken to bring about the change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Overpopulation has had devastating effects on
this
 world, with many
plants
 and
animals
 feeling the brunt of
this
.
However
, some people argue that the situation can be reversed, whilst others claim that what is done is done, and now we need to learn from our mistakes. In
this
 essay, we shall take into account both views.
First
 and foremost, overpopulation has caused humans to encroach on land, which was once free to
animals
 and
plants
.
However
, now as mankind takes up more and more area,
animals
 and
plants
 lose their natural habitats, resulting in many conflicts between
animals
 and humans. Over the past decades, we have witnessed the results of
such
 altercations, with many species getting wiped out.
For example
, the Tasmanian Tiger, which was hunted to extinction in the mid-nineties. Fast forward to the year 2021, as of 29th September, the United States has declared a total of 23 birds, fish, and other species to be extinct. Clearly, we individuals have not learned from our mistakes.
In addition
 to
this
, the deforestation of the Amazon, which spreads over nine countries in South America, is being removed at a rapid rate, to meet the global demand for land, which many manufacturers require for allowing to establish their factories.
On the other hand
, many people believe that with the use of technology, we can definitely bring back what we lost. All we need is the DNA samples of these creatures' closest living relatives, and we can clone these
animals
 and
plants
 back to existence.
However
,
this
 is morally wrong because if we create creatures in a laboratory, they will be immune to any disease, and
therefore
 may cause problems for the existing populations of
plants
 and
animals
. In conclusion, rather than worrying about what we lost, we must learn from the errors committed and ensure never to repeat them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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