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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 argue that the advantages of digital
books
 or
newspapers
 will lead to the disappearance of the traditional ones. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion. The primary reason why nobody will purchase
the
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printed
books
 and
newspapers
 is due to their negative effects on
environment
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. Conventional
books
 and
newspapers
 are made from wood, and
hence
 a plethora of trees
has
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 to be cut to provide materials for
paper
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the paper
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 manufacturing process.
This
 could exacerbate
the
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deforestation which is a headache issue
of
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 all countries around the globe. To address
this
 critical problem, many
goverments
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governments
 have imposed higher taxes on wood-made products, and
books
 or
newspapers
 are one of the bypass products of
woods
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wood
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.
As a result
, the price of
books
 and
newspapers
 shoots up and forces
people
think
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 about another economic way to replace printed
books
 and
newspapers
. On the other
hands
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, there is a variety of advantages of electronic
books
 and
newspapers
.
Firstly
, they do not need to be printed out on the papers so that they are very friendly to
environment
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, and the manufacturing and printing of
books
 and
newspapers
 are significantly reduced.
Therefore
, their price is much cheaper than the printed
books
 and
newspapers
, and
people
 can afford to buy them.
Secondly
,
people
 can easily update news or information anytime and anywhere as long as they have a smartphone connecting to wifi.
This
 is an extraordinary benefit for busy
people
 who has a limit of time per day.
Finaly
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Finally
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, the high quality and vivid image
helps
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 the digital
books
 and
newspapers
 outweigh the conventional ones. In my conclusion, the purchase of printed
newspapers
 or
books
 will be decreasingly dropped and
people
 will prefer to buy digital ones due to their obvious advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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