In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

In the modern world,
the
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technology has been revolutionised. Many advances have been made in the field of agriculture,
however
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the
availability
of food is still not a hundred
percent
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and
hence
, a lot of people still go hungry. The main causes of the
above mentioned
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problem are as follows. In
this
world,
money
is needed to buy the basic necessities of life. Nothing is available free of cost. To earn
money
,
the
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people need proper education and a stable job. The population of the world is increasing
day-by-day
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.
This
overcrowding, lack of proper education, unavailability of stable jobs and less number of
proper
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skilled training institutes are posing a great danger to the finances of a variety of countries, for, example Africa and some Asian countries. A lot of other issues, like unequal distribution of
money
,
money
laundering and black
money
etc are letting the rich increasing their assets each day, and
hence
, suppressing the poorer to the extent that they are left hungry by the end of the day. Certain steps can be taken to control these problems.
Firstly
, the
government
should implement strict strategies regarding
availability
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of free secondary education, so that, if the people are non-affording,
thay
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they
that
can still have a chance to live an independent life.
Also
, training skill programmes should be organised by the
government
in order to train the youth in various skills, and
hence
, make them a constructive asset for the country.
Secondly
,
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ones who are affording and have completed their
bachelors
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degree,
availability
of well
payed
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jobs must be ensured by the
government
. These jobs must be
merit based
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and the eligibility criteria must be crystal clear, in order to minimise the chance of wrong selections and bribery.
Thirdly
, awareness programmes for the public should be conducted regarding population control on
the
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social media platforms to control overpopulation. In conclusion, to fulfil the basic needs of life,
money
is important. The
government
should ensure the
availability
of enough resources for the public
,
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so that they can choose a career to raise the standard of their living and to decrease the dependency level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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