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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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Overpopulation is becoming an ever serious problem that both developing and developed countries are facing. For some countries, protecting their natural
beauty
 is key. In
this
 essay, we shall see the benefits of doing
this
 and how
this
 can be solved.
First
 and foremost, it is a scientifically proven fact that
areas
 of natural
beauty
 can help an individual, both mentally and physically. Natural
beauty
 helps reduce stress and is very relaxing on the eyes. They
also
 help produce good clean air which helps improve the lives of citizens. An important point to remember is that in one year a mature tree will absorb more than 48 pounds of carbon dioxide from the atmosphere and release oxygen in exchange.
Furthermore
, the natural
beauty
areas
 help to attract a variety of bird species which can provide a soothing effect, and attract bird enthusiasts. One way of preventing the destruction of natural
areas
 is that the government needs to impose laws against the destruction of naturally wooded
areas
.
For example
, preventing major corporations from mining or setting up their headquarters in certain
areas
, will help localities preserve their naturally beautified
areas
.
For example
, in the United States, there are many national parks available where companies are not allowed to set up shop.
This
 helps to preserve the area for future generations. In conclusion, the government needs to have a strong stance on the requirement of protected
areas
, irrespective of the increase in population, and the growing cry to accommodate all the people in the city.
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