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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In recent times, we can see that there are a number of nursing
homes
 that are being opened newly as there is a huge demand for people and places to take care of the elderly or the sick people. It is agreed that a lot of children and families put their elders in old age
homes
 and
this
 is increasing day by day. There are various reasons why the children are wanting to abandon their own parents by putting them in care
homes
 and separating them from their families and relatives. Some of the common reasons are misunderstandings between the family members like the daughter-in-law would have disagreements with the father-in-law or the mother-in-law and she might force her husband to move his parents to a care home or it could be the grandfather or the grandmother is bedridden and would require a nurse to take of them 24/7 where the couple could be working. The advantages of having the old ones moved to
homes
 are that the couple can enjoy their privacy, make any expense as they would not be answerable for anyone and take decisions independently there is no one to interfere with. The disadvantages are the grandchildren will not be able to spend time with their grandparents and vice versa.
Also
, the parents will not have anyone who can take of their kids especially if there is a newborn baby. It is generally observed that any kid growing along with their grandparents listening to their old family stories and struggles are unique and very intelligent. As the
next
 generation grows and becomes elders, the concept of joint family will again emerge as they would have realised what they have missed by not being with their grandparents because of their parent's mistake. Let us all hope that families again join and live happily together to create a better society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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