With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

Deforestation, urban development, and illegal hunting are hampering the animal population, and in many cases are putting them on the brink of extinction.
Although
many people don't feel the need to protect the
animals
and feel it is important to invest administrative funds in other sectors, it is in actuality important to protect them and their habitats. We shall discuss the reason for the same and the measures that need to be in place to enforce
this
.
First
and foremost, overpopulation has caused humans to encroach on land, which was once free to
animals
and plants.
However
, now as mankind takes up more and more area,
animals
and plants lose their natural habitats, resulting in many conflicts between
animals
and humans. Over the past decades, we have witnessed the results of
such
altercations, with many species getting wiped out.
For example
, the Tasmanian Tiger, which was hunted to extinction in the mid-nineties. Fast forward to the year 2021, as of 29th September, the United States has declared a total of 23 birds, fish, and other species to be extinct. Clearly, we individuals have not learned from our mistakes.
In addition
to
this
, the deforestation of the Amazon, which spreads over nine countries in South America, is being removed at a rapid rate, to meet the global demand for land, which many manufacturers require for allowing to establish their factories. Illegal hunting is
also
a problem because
this
is mainly carried out as a sport. There are many companies in Africa that promote
this
. What happens is, many foreigners come with large sums of cash hoping to bag an exotic animal. Since
this
money is useful to boost the economy of that firm, the coordinators indulge.
However
, what people do not know is that
this
is causing the population to dwindle. Some ways to deal with
this
problem is to create well-patrolled areas which are cornered of from the public, and which are only accessible by the
animals
.
However
,
this
does require the assistance of many locals as they are familiar with the land.
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