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Many crimes are related to the consumption of alcohol. Some people think the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol. Do you think this is an effective measure against crime? What other solutions can you suggest?

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Drinking too much
alcohol
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 increases the risk of injuries and violence. According to
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 fact,
therefore
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, some
people
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 will argue that the high
crime
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rate
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 is closely tied to the consumption of
alcohol
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, and the government should enact laws to ban
people
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 from drinking in order to decrease the
crime
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rate
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. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 idea as I think the influence of
this
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 method on tackling
crime
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 is minor and it cannot effectively reduce the
crime
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rate
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. Only by educating can really curb
crime
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.
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 of all, a prohibition against
alcohol
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 cannot prevent
crimes
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 from happening.
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 is because most criminals are conscious when committing
crimes
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.
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, appalling
crimes
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such
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 as abduction, killing, and bank robbery are usually carefully planned and are carried out by a group of
people
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 due to the fact that these criminals will not carry out
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 big events after getting drunk. While not allowing
people
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 to drink might avoid drunk driving, forbidding
people
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 to drink cannot really fight
crime
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.
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, education can indeed cut down the
crime
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rate
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. According to the research concerned, during the past two decades, most of the
crimes
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 happened because these criminals were less educated and were more disrespectful to others’ property and rights compared to normal
people
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.
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, if
people
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 can more or less develop virtues
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 as compassion, kindness, and courtesy through education, the
crime
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rate
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 will decrease. In conclusion, it is not difficult to imagine that many recommend the government to announce a prohibition against
alcohol
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 to deal with
crime
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, but
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 effort can merely bring some surface effects. The best way to address
crime
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 is through education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • consumption of alcohol
  • effective measure
  • ban alcohol
  • contribute to
  • types of crimes
  • other solutions
  • reduce the crime rate
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • stricter law enforcement
  • penalties
  • support
  • rehabilitation
  • alcohol addicts
  • root causes of crime
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