Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people, including official
organizations
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have been taking steps to restore wildlife. They are not hesitating to spend a huge amount of money on it. Whereas other believe that, if that money will use in the welfare of the society
then
there could be a better outcome. I do not agree with the latter view, as
animals
have the same right of survival as a human.
To begin
with, every living being is a part of a
food
chain, which is a fundamental system of life and in the absence of any living being from the
food
chain
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it could be an outcome disastrous for each of us. To illustrate it, the honey bee is a tiny insect, but not only it plays a vital role to balance the
food
chain, but it is
also
equally important for pollination. If there are no bees
then
there is no fruits and vegetables.
Moreover
,
animals
are connected to our meal whether directly or indirectly. Dairy products, vegetables, meat and various other
food
items are dependent on several
animals
. To maintain ecological balance we must protect them.
Furthermore
,
animals
are suffering the adverse effect of climate change due to human actions. Global warming is a quite famous term nowadays, as it has been turning into a gigantic issue for all organisms. Beyond the disruption of
animals
habitats, global warming
also
shifts the cyclical events in the lives of
animals
. It is heart-wrenching to see
animals
in circumstances where they are about to extinct.
Additionally
, as we can see the massive influx in population, we are destroying forests to settle down our people. No doubt that
this
forest is a home of numerous species, if a human is responsible for
this
then
, one ought to provide them shelter too. In the conclusion, I wholeheartedly support the restoration of
animals
as they are
also
a part of
this
world, they are equally important for our survival.
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