Some believe that it is beneficial to show foreign films while others feel this can have a negative impact on local culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In the contemporary era, western films popularities are rising speedily in many countries around the globe, it is often argued that
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motion pictures have some negative development on
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nation traditions and norms. While, others believe that, it
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positive progress on society. In, the forthcoming essay, I will explain both
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of
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and
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To begin
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people to improves their listing, reading and writing skills.
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a survey on migrated students about learning languages, they found 90%
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claim that
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they learn it from movies.
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information about other states
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land , they cannot face any cultural shock.
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are so lively and vibrant which can grab
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of their viewers compare to local films
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dull and dry , there
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no artificial effects.
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money and
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there is no scope to showing own traditions information of the world. To conclude, in my opinion,
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popular entertainment
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we cannot deny
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drawbacks. It is
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from foreign people learn so many things.
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