At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, based on figures that have been extracted from research, we are witnessing a severe contrast between

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means, in many countries, young

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are in majority compared with old

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essay has been written regarding that, by the proper guidance, societies can be benefited positively from

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matter in numerous fields.

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, it should be pointed out whether a country is developed or undeveloped, it is vital to possessing fresh manpower for keeping the momentum and staying in the game of progress. In

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, a developed country (or undeveloped one) needs the right substitutes for

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of keep doing what they have been up to.

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undeveloped nations have

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if their population contain a majority of old

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, there is a grave danger for aged communities on the way to progress.

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, the effectiveness and high capability of well-motivated young adults should not be neglected.

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, young ones are significantly more creative and productive than their parents, because they belong to

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era, so they are capable of understanding it more easily and make many innovating decisions on a vast scale.

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, there is an argument commonly put forward that creativity and similar skills are not enough, and experience is a crucial factor of being

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. Advocators claim,

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result will come when a person be a combination of knowledge, motivation, strength and experience. For closeness of mind, illustrate specific soldiers whose has been equipped with unique training, like marines (the USA navy special force). They all will be

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the exact same thing during their training but, there is a clear difference between newcomers and the ones that have had field experiences.

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, there are some holes that could not be filled just by

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level of readiness or severe enthusiasm. All in all, while many authorities are concern about

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issue, in some countries we can see a rising incidence of young

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population. And like any similar

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is controversial as well. But unlike the opposition groups, I firmly believe it should be looked at as a positive incident and arrange a plan for gaining the best outcome.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Its is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been suggested that primary school children should be taught how to grow vegetables and keep animals. To what extent the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.others believe it is more importantto give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.