many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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contain

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of sugar should be taxed to lessen buying by

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, since it may lead to serious health issues. From

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will not be much effective in declining the purchase of those

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. Governments have to take long term remedies to counter

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problem.

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of all, authorities should run awareness programmes on social media platforms to attract

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attention to the harmful effects of sugary products on citizens' health. Because

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high levels of sugar can result in multiple health problems

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as diabetes and hypertension.

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, taxation on similar

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will not result in the desired effects of lessening sweety

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consumption.

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would rather sacrifice

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luxurious

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to satisfy their addiction. The

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countries impose a toll on tobacco.

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legislation, individuals continue buying

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at the expense of other

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.

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, parents should be

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role models in guiding their children to the right way by discouraging them from purchasing harmful

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. On top of that, politicians have to enact holistic programmes in the educational curriculum of schools.

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the schools turn

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issue into practice by offering healthy meals for their students. In

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way, we engender sensible generations who will be aware of the impacts of eating sugary products. In conclusion, governments ought to institute initiatives aimed at various demographics to motivate them towards healthy

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.

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, parents have been recognised as role models for their children by instilling moral values and

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awarding

them towards the risks of consuming unhealthy

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and serving them healthy

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