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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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sun
energy
 is in demand in a number of homes across the globe.
This
 essay will explore the advantages and disadvantages and give a conclusion.
To begin
 with,the sun is a powerful source of
energy
 and it's beneficial to the environment. Solar panels have been introduced as one method of transmitting
energy
thus
 transforming solar
power
 as a source of clean
energy
.
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This
this
 kind of
power
 comes with low maintenance costs
this
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 means
its
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it is
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 affordable and incidences of tear and Wear hardly come by. Solar radiation is renewable and is available all the
Time
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,it can never run out
unlike
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 other forms of
power
 .
For instance
 introduction of solar panels ,
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this
 technology has been improved over the years
hence
 transforming solar
energy
 into a renewable form of
power
 .
On the other hand
 ,
hydro-electricity
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does not come
in
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cheap considering
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purchase of materials for installation
this
 will cost an arm and a leg ,another problem is it is weather dependent .Solar panels are dependent on sunlight to effectively gather
power
 ,
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thus
 rainy season will have an effect on
energy
 productivity. For instance
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at night solar is not available and alternative methods are to be devised. In conclusion
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renewable source of
power
 is
however
 expensive and inefficient but is safe for the environment because
emission
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the emission
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 of harmful gases is not a factor in
this
 kind of
power
. Economies of the world should consider transitioning to
this
 form of
energy
 Which has been welcomed by some industries .
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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