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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 century, the importance of maintaining the
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wildlife
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wild
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wildlife
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life
 safe is highly discussed by biologists and people from a variety of science
area
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. It has
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 increasing the idea of protecting the
enviroment
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environment
 and its
ecossytem
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ecosystem
 balance through polices that protects wild
animals
life
.
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, there are people that
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 the attention of
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government
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 and other private initiatives to human care needs. We know there are millions of people that are dying because of
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sub nutrition
, lack of clean water to drink, in summary, lack of minimal conditions to survive. I believe the importance of maintaining the
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wildlife
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wild
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wildlife
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life
 and their
enviroment
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environment
 is essential to decrease the impact of human
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 on
Earth
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 ecosystem, not only because of the
animals
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 but
also
 because of human beings. When an animal becomes
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extinct
, it will probably impact several other ecosystems
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 a wide extent.
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, if a predator is not available
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 one specific
enviroment
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environment
, the
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ecosystem
 will be impacted by the increase of
animals
 that would feed the predator that does not exist anymore.
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 target of
reserach
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research
 for agriculture
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 when a predator of a type of insect
that is
 considered a plague for a
specifi
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specific
 agriculture. Resulting in
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 loss for
human
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 population.
Therefore
, applying
investiments
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investments
investment
 on preserving wild
animals
life
 is so
benefitial
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beneficial
 as applying the
investiment
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investment
 for
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 of human population problems. Of
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course
that is
 necessary to apply a fair balance between the amount of
investiment
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investment
 in each
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initiative
, but keeping
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 mind that
investiment
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investment
on
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 animal protection is not a waste of money, but an
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investment
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human
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 being present and future.
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