Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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century, the importance of maintaining the
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wild
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safe is highly discussed by biologists and people from a variety of science
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. It has
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increasing the idea of protecting the
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and its
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balance through polices that protects wild
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life
.
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the attention of
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and other private initiatives to human care needs. We know there are millions of people that are dying because of
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, lack of clean water to drink, in summary, lack of minimal conditions to survive. I believe the importance of maintaining the
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wild
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and their
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is essential to decrease the impact of human
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on
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ecosystem, not only because of the
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because of human beings. When an animal becomes
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, it will probably impact several other ecosystems
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a wide extent.
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, if a predator is not available
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one specific
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, the
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will be impacted by the increase of
animals
that would feed the predator that does not exist anymore.
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target of
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for agriculture
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when a predator of a type of insect
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considered a plague for a
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agriculture. Resulting in
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loss for
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population.
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, applying
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on preserving wild
animals
life
is so
benefitial
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as applying the
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for
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of human population problems. Of
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that is
necessary to apply a fair balance between the amount of
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in each
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, but keeping
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mind that
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on
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animal protection is not a waste of money, but an
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on
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human
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being present and future.
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