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More And More Students Are Going Abroad For Higher Studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh disadvantages?

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In the modern world, studying
in
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 higher education level
seem
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 to be necessary. Some experts believe that learning abroad give more benefits than drawbacks. Personally, I agree with
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. Below is the essay which
show
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 the supporting reasons. Going to study overseas is a huge opportunity for students to learn new things.
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, being in
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 different
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, learners are forced to learn
new
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 language.
This
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 can easily help them develop their communication skills because they have to use that foreign language in everyday life.
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, living in
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country
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 from their hometown will encourage learners to be more independent. Without living in
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country
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 with their families or friends,
student
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 have to take full responsibility
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 their lives and stand on their own feet.
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 but not least, living in
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country
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,
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the student
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students
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 can make lots of international friends which make them have more connections than being only in their
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.
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, the cost
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 studying abroad is much
more
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higher than studying in their hometown
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. Those who study in another
country
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 have to spend money not only
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 the tuition fee but
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 another
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cost
 of living including the plane ticket.
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, different countries have different time zone which can be the major cause of health issues. To
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, foreigners who cannot adopt their lifestyle well
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 to suffer from several health problems
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 as insomnia and due to the difference of time zone. Having considered
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 matter carefully, learning in
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country
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countries
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 has more
advantage
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advantages
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 than disadvantages regarding
to
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the
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. In my perspective, it will be abundant benefits for students who study higher education abroad.
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, it is worth
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spending more money on supporting them to learn in
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country
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.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exposure
  • Global network
  • Immerse
  • Perspectives
  • Specialized programs
  • World-renowned
  • Adaptability
  • Independence
  • Navigating
  • Tuition fees
  • Living expenses
  • Currency differences
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • Isolation
  • Adapting
  • Language barrier
  • Resume
  • Recognized
  • Valued
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