More And More Students Are Going Abroad For Higher Studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh disadvantages?

In the modern world, studying at
higher
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education level seems to be necessary. Some experts believe that learning abroad give more benefits than drawbacks. Personally, I agree with
this
idea. Below is the essay which shows the supporting reasons. Going to study overseas is a huge opportunity for students to learn new things.
Firstly
, being in a different
country
, learners are forced to learn a new language.
This
can easily help them develop their communication skills because they have to use that foreign language in everyday life.
Secondly
, living in a different
country
from their hometown will encourage learners to be more independent. Without living in the same
country
with their families or friends,
student
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students

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have to take full responsibility for their lives and stand on their own feet.
Last
but not least, living in a foreign
country
, students can make lots of international friends which make them have more connections than being only in their
country
.
On the other hand
, the cost of studying abroad is much higher than studying in their hometown
country
. Those who study in another
country
have to spend money not only on the tuition fee but
also
another
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cost of living including the plane ticket.
Moreover
, different countries have different time zone which can be the major cause of health issues. To illustrate, foreigners who cannot adopt their lifestyle well tend to suffer from several health problems
such
as insomnia and due to the difference of time zone. Having considered
this
matter carefully, learning in a different
country
has more advantages than disadvantages regarding
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the above reasons. In my perspective, it will be abundant benefits for students who study higher education abroad.
Therefore
, it is worth spending more money on supporting them to learn in
new
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country
.
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