The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crime in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent decades, amount of TV series and Movies which picture many violent crimes and murders increase dramatically. Unfortunately, due to
this
emphasis rate of lawlessness
acts
rise in society significantly. I definitely agree with the idea that governments out to regulate the programs because of reducing the percentage of harshness. On the one hand, there is no doubt that teenagers are the vulnerable group of our communities when it comes to committing a crime. when they see many cruelties on TV maybe inspire them to do that because they think that it would be amusing.
Furthermore
, if people see many
acts
of violence on a daily basis, it will be like an ordinary act for them and don't do any special reaction.
For instance
, nowadays many citizens when reading murder news, it doesn't make them sad because they read the same news every day.
Hence
, if authorities want to reduce the number of violations and cruel
acts
in their society, they ought to regulate the amount of violence on TV programs.
Although
there are so many other solutions, make some rules for producing television programs can reduce some detrimental and harsh thinking in society before anyone commits a crime.
Also
, some movies like the movie about serial killers, sometimes are shown to people how they kill a person in detail that are terrible. To conclude, I believe that if a country’s dwellers see fewer violent movies and even knowing about some violent
acts
, it has a dire impact on the rate of crime in that country.
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