In many developing countries, there is an increased movement of workers from rural areas in to cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

It is not a secret that the countryside is dying. Many workers move from villages to cities, it has many reasons and many problems are connected. I am inclined to believe it depends on many factors and some of them are crucial. Nowadays, many qualified workers have to move from the countryside to more developed places
such
as the city due to the absence of workplaces. The population in villages has been reducing rapidly since 1990.
This
issue is related to the decreasing budget in
this
region and the
lack
of support from the government’s side.
Moreover
, if the government does not allocate sufficient money it will lead to a
lack
of opportunities. Many youngsters realise that fact and try to find a much better place to move to. I am convinced,
lack
of the budget is the main reason and directly related to diminishing the population in these regions.
Also
, people who have already moved from the countryside notice the worst infrastructure, more expensive prices in shops rather than in cities, product’s deficiency and
lack
of facilities and colleges.
For example
: in my higher education
institution
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there were many students from villages due to the complete absence of colleges and higher education institutions. Based on my experience, the
lack
of any possibilities for the potential personal growing suburb is doomed. In a nutshell, village’s habitants do not want to live in these regions. Many workers have to abandon their homes due to finding another place for work.
Moreover
, if the young generation saw the differences between cities and suburbs are tremendous, they would not return.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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