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In most countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 industry is developing in many countries in the world. Fast
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 seems to have become a
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food
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 of many
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 and especially young children.
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 consumption.
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, to my way of thinking, it is undeniable that its drawbacks outweigh its advantages. On the
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 hand, fast
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 is
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 of the choices of diet for many
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.
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 with, junk
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 is prepared and served quickly. Undoubtedly, many busy
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 don’t have time to take care of their meals.
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, many restaurants have fast
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 ready to serve every time and anywhere.
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, it is true that fast
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 is more affordable than
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. To illustrate, a hamburger costs three dollars while
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 to create a family meal that costs at least 10 dollars. For
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 reason, processed
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 saves
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's pocket money.
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, despite the positives mentioned, I would argue that these drawbacks outweigh the benefits.
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,
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 of the major negative effects is the harmful long-term impact on health. Indeed, fast
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 is less healthy than home-cooked meals because it is high in saturated fats and added sugars.
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,
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 consumption is to blame for many diseases
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 as heart attack, increasing blood pressure, etc.
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, due to calories and processed preservatives in fast
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,
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 are at risk of obesity, especially childhood obesity.
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,
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 thing
people
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 worry about is
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 poisoning. To paraphrase, fast
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 chains don’t vouch for
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 safety. So, it is easy to have a digestive disease due to
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 additives. In conclusion,
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 junk
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 helps
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 to save money and time by cooking meals, its negative effects on health are undeniable. It seems to me that
people
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 should control their eating behaviour to protect their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Nutritional value
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Job creation
  • Disposable income
  • Culinary diversity
  • Processed foods
  • Economic stimulus
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Sustainable practices
  • Public health
  • Consumerism
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