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Describe a movies is good? Are you agree or disagree

#movies
I totally agree that movies are essential and useful for every
people
. Pictures show the
real life
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 issues
on
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in
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dramatic
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a dramatic
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 and emotional
way
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ways
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,
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apply
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 and study every feature
lovers
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lover
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 to reality.
This
 essay will illustrate the meaning of films and
effect
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their effect
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 on
people
. Nowadays, a majority of
people
 are watching a
film
, due to the fact it interests a person with unpredictable histories and increased in drama. Films developed in
meaning
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the meaning
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 of the story and give to
group
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a group
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 of
people
 the feeling, which they did not felt previously.
For instance
, by watching a
film
 called “History of Benjamin Button”, I felt emotional fall and sadness. There is given a
well written
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 plot that the unique species want to live a life like others do in
this
 novel.
Consequently
, I felt blues, when the main character died unhappy and
sorrowed
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. There are groups of
film
 lovers
are
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that are
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 intensively increasing. It shows that good movies find their audience and become a leader in
film
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the film
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 industry.
For example
, the fans of
the
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apply
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one of the greatest
show
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shows
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 ever, “Harry Potter” called themselves
as
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Potter
man's
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men
man
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. Usually, they provide their charities related to
film
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the film
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. In July 2018 in Berlin was the ultimate parade, which includes
above
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the above
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 30000 Potter man.
In addition
,
this
 meeting will provide
this
 year too. If I were free that day, I will have visited
this
 charity. In conclusion, films are
good
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a good
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 and useful tool for everyone. They illustrate the problems in reality and help to overcome
such
 sad situations given to us by life.
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