Some people believe that teenager should always follow the examples of older people, whereas some believe it is natural in teenager to challenge what old people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There are some
people
who believe that
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adolescents should obey their parents and grandparents. While, others argue that, young
people
should
listen
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their
heart
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and it is not
necessary
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always
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follow the guidelines of adults. In , the forthcoming essay, I will explain both sides of
this
argument and
also
give my point of view.
To begin
with, older
people
like , father, mother or grandparents are considering
most
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intelligent and knowledgeable person in a family or in
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society. Because
,
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they live long
life
compare to teen and
also
have
lot
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of experiences about
journey
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of
life
.
Furthermore
, they
also
face ups and downs which help them to understand about
reality
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the reality
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of the world. Due to that, they are the best adviser for younger
people
.
For example
, in the early stage of
life
boys and girls were confused about many things like
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subjects choosing, school or college etc, so that, with the guidelines of parents, they overcome it and
also
get success in their
life
.
However
,
on the other hand
, those
people
who are against
this
statement
thus
, sometimes adults try to impose their decision without considering juveniles views. They thought they have all right to do that anything because they think are still unable to decide what is white or black.
For instance
, most of the countries in
asian
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Asian
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parents choose subjects, carrier objects on behalf of their children.
As a result
, they lose interest on
study
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the study
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and
also
suffer from depression or obesity.
Moreover
, in
present
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time,
teenager
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teenagers
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are more mature than before , they should have
this
privilege to
live
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love their own way. To conclude, in my opinion, it is undeniable truth older
people
most knowledgeable but before
take
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any action they should consult with their children. As well as young
people
should take advice from experts person from
family
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the family
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.
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