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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for the poor in undeveloped countries but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

Overpopulation
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, a rapid increase in
population
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 in a small period of time, has always been considered to be a major issue in every
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nations
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nation
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, from the poor and underdeveloped
nations
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 to the rich and developing countries. Most
nations
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 regard
overpopulation
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 immediately as a crisis when it appears due to the nature of its
impacts
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 on social
life
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 and living quality.
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,
governments
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 and officials can take measures to minimize the detrimental effects of
overpopulation
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 and to take advantage of
such
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phenomenon
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a phenomenon
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This
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 essay aims to discuss a portion of the problems caused by a boom in
population
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 and to provide plausible solutions to the issues.
Overpopulation
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 can significantly affect the city's infrastructure and
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 affecting
people
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's
life
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.
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, to start off, the rise in
population
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 correlates with the rise in demand for resources and services, which may overwhelm the city's previously-built infrastructure. A boom in
urban
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population
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 can lead to the failure of basic systems
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 as power grids and water pipes to provide resources to the
people
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, which will reduce the essential portion of
life
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 qualities
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 as hygiene and heating. One example of
such
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 is in today modern China, where the
population
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 is over 1.5 billion
people
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. Due to the lack of
high quality
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 coal for energy production, the government has to permit a power quota, limiting the
amount
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 of power businesses and
people
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 can use.
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,
people
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's
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life
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are
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 worsened, as there is no electricity to run
heater
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the heater
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 in the coldest winter recorded in China.
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, services' availability
are
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 significantly reduced due to a larger demographic. As children go through their childhood, they require basic education, healthcare, and parental protection to grow.
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, a large
number
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 of youngsters put a strain on the education, medical systems and the economy.
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,
governments
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 can minimize the
impacts
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 of
overpopulation
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 through measures
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 as family planning and improve
women
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's knowledge and accessibility about and to birth control.
Firstly
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, to start off, by planning the
number
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 of children a couple can have,
governments
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 and
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 can decrease the annual
number
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 of
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children
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child birth
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childbirth
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. For illustration, in Vietnam, couples are advised to have about 2 youngsters, which has drastically reduce the
impacts
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 of
overpopulation
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.
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, by improving access to birth control means to
women
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, the severity of
overpopulation
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 will be curbed. One example is in India, where
women
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is
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 encouraged to have rudimentary knowledge about health.
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,
women
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 can make the choice of whether to have a child or not, which will limit the
number
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 of children being born into poverty. In conclusion, overpopulations not only harm
people
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 and businesses through inadequate resources and strains put on public services, and
governments
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 can reduce the
impacts
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 of
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 phenomenon by introducing family planning and increasing
women
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's accessibility to health knowledge.
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, the issue rich, industrialized
nations
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 are facing is not
overpopulation
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, but rather the lack of it. Personally, I believe that a decreasing
population
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 is the result of having too many good things, and should be considered to be as severe as
overpopulation
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.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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