Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

Moving out from native
country
to
foreign
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country
has been developing the core impact on the society in both positive and negative sides,
although
there are many facts influence
this
such
as quality of education,
status
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of personal life so on and
also
lead the considerable value of both money and
human kind
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transfer to
foreign
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a foreign
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state. To commence with situations, most of the developing countries
such
as Nepal, Afghanistan, Pakistan and Sri Lanka have been facing
this
issue in
rapid
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way where those
government
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failed to maintain their educational system up to the standard level as most of them considering to allocate
major
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proportion of
budget
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on educational infrastructure other than module development. As
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example here in Sri
lanka
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, we are mandated to follow the much older module in education which was
initially
developed in 1948, that should need a definite change to sacrifice the modern industry requirement.
Second
of all,
People
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passionate to have the
status
of life as
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living concept where it can be
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as a result
of that humankind moving to
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country
instead
of living with their native state which is the easiest way to grab it. Nowadays
people
are psychologically developed to thinking
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ahead on their socialism which influence the luxury life which will help to maintain the
status
among the public. As an example, senior managers of
company
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always try to
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a manager in all
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of
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as
status
and luxury are the
fact
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of all these consequences.
Furthermore
, while migrating to a foreign destination,
people
are moving with the money, talented brain and their future generation
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will bring
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huge impact to the native
country
economy and social development. Humans are the most utmost asset to the
country
which need to be secure with
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destiny. To summarize, changing destination to one another, is not going to discourage with any factor as
people
keep moving
although
there
are
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lot of
thing
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that government can do to reduce
those migration
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, as I said. without
people
, it is useless having a state.
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  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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