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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays, we live in a globalised world where countries can import
food
 from other countries. Supermarkets have an advantage with
this
 because the number of items they can offer is bigger.
This
 advantage has some problems
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 because they will not buy
food
 from local shops and the footprint is bigger. 
Firstly
,
food
 that has to travel around all the world to end on a shelve from a home, have a huge footprint.
This
 means that when people buy bananas from Ecuador,
this
 fruit has travelled thousands of miles in a boat that consume fuel and produce contaminating gases. 
Secondly
, the main reason for supermarkets to shell
food
 from overseas is because the price is much cheaper than buying it locally. It is normal that if they can buy some type of fruit for half of the price they will.
This
 is not only because shops
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consumers
also
 have their responsibility because their choice usually is the cheapest option. 
On the other hand
, the reason why supermarkets bring imported
food
 is
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 maybe in that country is out of season or it does not grow in that area. So, the only way to offer some kind of foods that if they were not imported they would not be available.  In conclusion, even though there are some cons against bringing groceries from other parts of the world sometimes is the only way to have access to them and at a fair price.
This
 is kind of convenient when you like some
food
 and you want to eat
this
 at home.
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