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Many products that we buy are made in other countries.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

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In normal life, we cannot do everything in our life so sometimes, we need help from our neighbours or somebody else. Same as every country has to import or export
for
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survive
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. There are some people who argue that other nation objects have some negative impact. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the merits and demerits of
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 statement. The
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 and foremost disadvantage is that the gadgets which we are buying would be more expensive because retailers add the other charges and taxes.
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new
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 iphone13 has
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 in Canada is around $1500 but if we want to buy in India the price is around one lakh twenty thousand that will be $2000 according to Canada.
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, sometimes, it is difficult to repair the objects as we are unable to easily get the spare parts of the
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, some china phones cannot be repaired, the reason is shopkeepers have no necessary electrical gadgets that we can use in the cellphones. On the other side, there are some advantages of
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 items.
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, these devices could be beneficial for us.
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, if we are visiting other countries and we
already
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 used to that land's items , it will be easy to know how to use other products as well as easy to survive that area.
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, we can get knowledge of new
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coming
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 from other nations. In spite of
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, farming is everywhere,
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,
everyfield
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every field
 is not capable to grow food that's why food is
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 import and export which is the most important to live
healthy
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life
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. In conclusion, everything coming with pros and cons so
its
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upto
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up to
 us how we are taking these
things
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Government
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 is buying or selling different
things
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 because it is beneficial for humankind.
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