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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT CHILDREN SHOULD NOT BE GIVEN HOMEWORK EVERY DAY, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT THEY MUST GET HOMEWORK EVERY DAY IN ORDER TO BE SUCCESSFUL AT SCHOOL. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

#people #children #homework #school
Classwork is essential for learners to help them improve in their studies other people believe that
assignments
 do not have an impact on the learners.
this
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give a conclusion.
Firstly
,
assignments
 are shared
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with students
 to monitor the progress and understanding of a particular concept ,classwork is an integral part
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 any scholars studies because
this
 points out the weakest and stronger points that will need more attention by the tutor.
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 with the introduction of
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competency
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 based curriculum in my
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has helped bring out skills and expertise in a number of areas and the
assignments
 shared after the lessons
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 it all.
On the other hand
,schoolwork in excess will most of the time lead to incomplete work,poor
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performance
 and pressure,most of the students will try completing
assignments
 to avoid punishments but not for the purposes of perfecting a skill.
For example
 for every lesson the teacher accompanies it with some homework
then
this
 will leave learners overwhelmed leading to poor
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performance
 in schools In
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 every drill given to scholars to attempt is an
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attempt
 to
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success
,
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 the number and
quantityshould
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quantity should
 be reduced and relevance emphasised in-
orderto
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order to
 help the scholars.
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