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Research says more and more business training and business meeting taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are too many benefits to the usage of the internet, and one of the most important is the interaction of human beings using computers. The speed of
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 has helped to improve video and audio quality but at the same time, unfortunately, people are losing the opportunity to interact
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 other. In
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 more advantages than disadvantages to using new ways of communication through the net.
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 of all, companies, universities, even the Government had saved a lot of money on travel expenses using online meetings,
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 when there are master conferences, the attendance can reach more than two hundred people. Another great impact of developing
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 is that people can get easy and not so expensive, sometimes free. For those that are recording already, the users can make their own scheduled and take the training at their convenience.
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 home.
On the other hand
, one of the problems with meeting online is those that are scheduled for the three continents, indeed Asia, America and Europe. Time concerns is a problem because one of the regions has to take the conferences too late,
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. Canada 4:00 am meanwhile China can be at noon and London
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 the morning. In ,conclusion the tendency of
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 of communication can bring many benefits but not cover the 100% of needs like the interaction with
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 and face to face meeting, never could be equal.
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