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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 day, after spreading of the internet and the world be a small village that the direction to be globalization, while community tend to try the different cuisines that
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 in different videos.
Therefore
, encourage to consumption of new products from other countries than your local own.
Although
 most of the
city
 should be provided with various options, I believe should consume local
food
 and increase the different
types
 of dishes from another culture.
Firstly
, locally grown produce and promotes small business. In another word, if people buy from local shops, restaurants and vendors will be increase tax, as a
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 on
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 country
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be higher.
For instance
, local
foodfood
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food food
good food
 when increase bought from people in
this
city
 it will directly contribute to the
city
’s wellness.
Furthermore
, feed grown in your
city
 is affordable rather than product from another country because the government paid the taxes on their
food
.
For example
, Egypt is the most popular seafood, so the fish bought from the local market is cheaper than supermarket fish.
Secondly
, encourage the farmer to produce those new
types
 of crops and ingredients there is used to preparing the international dishes.
Thus
, work on improving the quality of
food
 and contribute to the economy and it will open a new job,
in addition
, when the different
types
 of dishes will be available in many restaurants in the
city
 that impact will be higher to encourage many tourists to come to visit new places in your country.
For example
, in ,Egypt the people come from overseas when finding different
food
such
 as local Egyptian
food
 and international
food
that is
 influenced in your feeling to try many
types
 of
food
. In conclusion, while there are a lot of advantages to imported produced,
that is
 many things should government to improve
such
 as help the local vendors to be more productive.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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