An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and heath care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?
An increasing number of
children
are overweight which could result
many problems when they grow older both in terms of their Add the preposition
inresult
fromresult
health
and heath
care costs. Why do you think so many Correct your spelling
health
children
are overweight? What could be done to solve this
problem?
Obesity among children
are
increasing Change the verb form
is
Add a hyphen
day-by-day
day-by
day. Correct your spelling
day by
Parents
are forced to spend more on their health
as being obese might result in many health
issues. I think bad eating habits in youngsters results in overweight
. The Add a missing verb
being overweight
parents
should keep a track of eating for their kids
.
The most important point , children
nowadays are lazy, and they have very
bad eating Add an article
a very
schedule
which Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
make
them obese. Change the verb form
makes
Parents
should always see what their kids
are eating. They should make sure that their kids
are indulge
in physical activities. Through the advancement of technology, Change the verb form
are indulging
children
are more inclined towards playing video games ,
and spending more Remove the comma
apply
time
on mobile phones. They should set a schedule for everything, and make sure that they are doing it. For example
, earlier children
does
not have access to Change the verb form
do
mobile
Add an article
a mobile
the mobile
phone
that’s why they are healthy. The Fix the agreement mistake
phones
time
spend
on Change the verb form
spends
mobile
Add an article
a mobile
phone
should be reduced.to a limited number of hours.
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phones
in
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, in this case,
this
case is that,
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Parents
do not have enough time
to spend with their children
, they are too busy that they hire maids to take care of them. Parents
should encourage children
to eat less fatty foods as kids
only want to have food
which are
delicious and, delicious Change the verb form
is
food
are
most of the Change the verb form
is
time
are full of fats, carbohydrates and , among others. They should encourage them to play games which helps them to improve their mental health
. They should give them the
Correct article usage
apply
home cooked
meals as they are prepared in clean surroundings, and with less oil. Add a hyphen
home-cooked
For example
, even most of
Change preposition
apply
the
dieticians prefer to have Correct article usage
apply
home cooked
Add a hyphen
home-cooked
food
as it will have all the nutrients for children
to grow, and will not make kids
fat.
In conclusion, lack of physical and mental activity trend among children
make them obese. Parents
have to put in efforts and spare time
for their children
to make sure they get home cooked
Add a hyphen
home-cooked
food
,
and participate in physical activities Remove the comma
apply
also
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