An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and heath care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?

An increasing number of

children

are overweight which could

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many problems when they grow older both in terms of their

health

and

heath

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care costs. Why do you think so many

children

are overweight? What could be done to solve

this

problem? Obesity among

children

are

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increasing

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day-by-day

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day.

Parents

are forced to spend more on their

health

as being obese might result in many

health

issues. I think bad eating habits in youngsters results in

overweight

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. The

parents

should keep a track of eating for their

kids

. The most important point ,

children

nowadays are lazy, and they have

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bad eating

schedule

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which

make

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them obese.

Parents

should always see what their

kids

are eating. They should make sure that their

kids

are indulge

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in physical activities. Through the advancement of technology,

children

are more inclined towards playing video games

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and spending more

time

on mobile phones. They should set a schedule for everything, and make sure that they are doing it.

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, earlier

children

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not have access to

mobile

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phone

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that’s why they are healthy. The

time

spend

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on

mobile

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phone

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should be reduced.to a limited number of hours. Another point

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Parents

do not have enough

time

to spend with their

children

, they are too busy that they hire maids to take care of them.

Parents

should encourage

children

to eat less fatty foods as

kids

only want to have

food

which

are

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delicious and, delicious

food

are

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most of the

time

are full of fats, carbohydrates and , among others. They should encourage them to play games which helps them to improve their mental

health

. They should give them

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home cooked

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meals as they are prepared in clean surroundings, and with less oil.

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dieticians prefer to have

home cooked

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food

as it will have all the nutrients for

children

to grow, and will not make

kids

fat. In conclusion, lack of physical and mental activity trend among

children

make them obese.

Parents

have to put in efforts and spare

time

for their

children

to make sure they get

home cooked

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food

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and participate in physical activities

also