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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
Nowadays, some
people
 facing unlucky
situation
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 but still they continue living with it especially in unworthy work and lack of funds
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 While others argued
atleast
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at least
 to attempt and improve circumstances.
This
 essay will tackle both views as well as my opinion.
To begin
 with, putting yourself in a bad
situation
 is hard but they do not have a choice is to accept
to
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it.
For example
, my friend is working in a company but before she will start
she
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 need to sign a contract agreement and unfortunately the one she signed in her country is not the same
when
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 she came
in
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 Saudi Arabia.
Therefore
,
instead
 of going back home to her
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 she accepted it even though it is not her fault because she already started working and spent a
lots
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 of money
for
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this
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argued that it is better to make an effort and to take some measures in order to develop
such
 conditions.
For instance
, many
people
 nowadays are trying to work in
other country
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 so that their life
situation
 will upgrade,and earning more money.
Additionally
, in order to acquire new learning skills
that
is
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 not available in their state and
also
 to improve financial status.
Thus
,
this
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people
 are full of determination and hardship because they want to enhance their current life
situation
.
Therefore
, in my point of view, having in a poor condition is out of our control sometimes but there is no harm in trying other things that will gain us beneficial in our life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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