An increasing number of developing countries are expanding their tourist industry. Why do you think it is the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, people are getting more inclined towards tourism and visit overseas destinations,
consequently
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several nations are
contructing
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constructing
their travelling attractions on large scale.
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the discussion
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of factors responsible for
this
development and
also
believe it is
benefitial
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beneficial
for economic aspects of
nation
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the nation
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.
To begin
with, the prime reason behind nations encouragement to tourist attractions is
shophistication
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sophistication
in globalization. As nowadays travelling offers several kinds of activities and occasion to enjoy and feel travellers variety is the spice of life.
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,
dubai
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is
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one of the most popular tourist
attraction
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among
travllers
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travellers
, they have
encourage
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their
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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